Whew, I’ll “admit” life got busy for a few days. Let’s get back to #WIPSnips with a little dialogue between Elisa and Lucas after a tense encounter with the local constabulary.

“The police, Lucas? Really? You’ll work with anyone, won’t you?”
“That’s not exactly fair,” he grumbled, cradling his chin in his palm and gazing away, reluctant to meet her disappointment.
“She admitted it right there, she threatened you, Lucas. She’s a thug.” Elisa turned away and stepped back into the bedroom, rubbing at the tension building across her forehead. “What are you going to tell her?”
He stopped himself from openly chewing his lip as his eyes rolled to meet hers. “I’m not giving her your name. She’s just trying the bad cop routine on me. I can smooth this over.”
“With all due respect, Lucas, if she’s dealing with you, she’s crooked. You can’t trust her.”


Taken from part four of “The Fourth Sigil”
Book One of “The Seeker”
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“The police, Lucas? Really? You’ll work with anyone, won’t you?” “That’s not exactly fair,” he grumbled, cradling his chin in his palm and gazing away, reluctant to meet her disappointment. “She admitted it right there, she threatened you, Lucas. She’s a thug.” Elisa turned away and stepped back into the bedroom, rubbing at the tension building across her forehead. “What are you going to tell her?” He stopped himself from openly chewing his lip as his eyes rolled to meet hers. “I’m not giving her your name. She’s just trying the bad cop routine on me. I can smooth this over.” “With all due respect, Lucas, if she’s dealing with you, she’s crooked. You can’t trust her.” Taken from part four of “The Fourth Sigil” Book One of “The Seeker”

1 comments — live from bluesky

Beverly Johnson · 0 · 5h ago
Welcome back. That dialogue lands well; the tension is palpable without being spelled out. Do you find that aftermath scenes reveal your characters' true selves, or does the conflict push them there?